I know it's in NY state, and it may be only a two hour drive on 90 west to the NY border, but it is a looooooooooong way to Niagara for a long weekend!
This passage presents a good opportunity to use the colon : There are three different falls that make up the entire Niagara Falls. The American Falls, the Bridal Veil Falls, and the Canadian/Horseshoe Falls are the three components.
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Rough patch: "The passengers on the boat are given raincoats to prevent them from being completely soaked form head to two. Although, they don’t keep you 100% dry, the tourists prefer to have them on." Make some changes here! (hint: spelling/proofing/ending sentences with prepositions/comma placement)
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I know it's in NY state, and it may be only a two hour drive on 90 west to the NY border, but it is a looooooooooong way to Niagara for a long weekend!
ReplyDeleteThis passage presents a good opportunity to use the colon : There are three different falls that make up the entire Niagara Falls. The American Falls, the Bridal Veil Falls, and the Canadian/Horseshoe Falls are the three components.
You've done an excellent job with stats and research.
Rough patch: "The passengers on the boat are given raincoats to prevent them from being completely soaked form head to two. Although, they don’t keep you 100% dry, the tourists prefer to have them on." Make some changes here! (hint: spelling/proofing/ending sentences with prepositions/comma placement)
Be careful with agreement: "Eventually, the boat driver is able to navigate their way out..."
Spelling and comma placement are weaknesses to improve. Use the tools available!